When I presented the animatic in todays lecture, I got a mixed response. For some the animation had a very linear story but gets confusing after a certain point, a bit incoherent. For some the closeup shots gave it a suffocating feel and should had some long shots to break this suffocation. One of my teachers felt that the story lacks the essence of the mother, so I need to register her through various means.
After the feedback I also realised the story was half baked and I need to add some more scenes and revise the story a bit to make it more coherent and linear. Since the poem does not tell, if the mother is alive or not, I have to bring her empathy into the story and make it a bit more relatable and dramatic.
Arsalan Awais 