After presenting the final timeline cut to my teachers, they felt the pacing was off in some places and the holes in orange socks was too abrupt and in the face. Since the overall message I want to give throughout the animation is that; how our mothers pamper us as a child but when were grow up and apart we do not give ourselves that same level of care and are snobbish.
In terms of visuals, I was lacking a long shot as a deal breaker to help the poem settle down a bit for the viewer. So, I created a panorama shot of the room to show how much of a mess the person really is.
After adding the smoke trail and tracking camera movement this is the final result. I believe this was a much smarter move, as this gave more depth to the animation and gravitas to the whole poem as well. Establishing shots are necessary when dealing with such medium.
Arsalan Awais 